I spotted this gem from Somerset Council’s head of human resources, which in a single paragraph spectacularly manages to break two golden writing rules – avoid jargon and keep sentences short and simple:
“Having finished my deck of Powerpoint slides I shall now ping over to Paul who will no doubt be granular in providing you with the long-tail solutions in implementing the TOM by the TIMS through the twilight zone and beyond”
A convoluted, jargon-filled sentence is sure to confuse, rather than enlighten, the audience!
